Peer Review

Peer Review

Learning Outcome #4:

Peer Review I peer reviewed Megan Kimmel’s paper for essay #1. I reviewed her paper in the exact way that I review my own work prior to submission. I made sure that the introduction includes a summary of the works that are being analyzed and a clear and arguable thesis that is a roadmap for the essay. For example, in Megan’s essay, I commented that the thesis statement was good but that I thought the summaries of Gladwell’s and Appiah’s essay could be expanded to provide clearer summaries, especially Appiah’s. I also found, later in the paper, an argument that was not included in the original thesis and recommended revising the thesis to include this argument. I looked at each body paragraph critically to make sure the claim is clear, the support is relevant, and the explanation ties it all in. I evaluated each paragraph for its relevance to the argument and whether ideas from each claim are integrated and I also evaluated the mechanics such as transition sentences, awkward phrasing, etc. In Megan’s essay, there were several examples where I thought the support/quotes needed more in-depth explanation to tie into the thesis. As an example, Megan makes the claim, “Appiah argues, through cosmopolitanism ideas, that coexisting around differences will create a shift in someone’s mind, but that is not beneficial for creating massive changes.” She then provides support for this claim with the quote followed by an explanation of how the quote supports the claim: “The foreignness of foreigners, the strangeness of strangers: These things are real enough. It’s just that we’ve been encouraged… to exaggerate their significance.” This lends support to the “us” versus “them” mentality, which is suggesting that there is a larger divide amongst people today.” My comment was to expand on the explanation and relevance of how coexistence does not always create change but widens the divide because later in the paragraph there is some conflict in what she is claiming. Another example is the quote supporting the claim that people who want to create change are those with strong ties to the cause. The quote used was about how racial insubordination was risky and the students were terrified. I suggested that this quote was not supporting the claim at all and recommended that it was better suited as support for high-risk activism rather that strong ties. In general, I tried to include suggestions in the comments as if I were revising this paper as my own. I hope that my peer review of this paper helped Megan rethink the strength of the claims she made, and the appropriateness of the quotes used as well as some of the more awkward structuring of sentences or flow of paragraphs. (https://thefoundationspecialists.com) Not surprisingly, I found that, while reviewing her work, I recognized that comments I was making might also be a weakness in my own paper. So, peer reviewing was also helpful to me.

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